The Usurpers (100 words)
There was no sensation in his helpless body, as he lay there – only searing pain that tore like fire.
He sensed a feeling of utter injustice - like life had stabbed him in the back.
How could this happen? How could he fail?
Patiently, the vultures circled above him.
And then he saw his enemy raise his weapon.
“Fat bastard!†He hissed in rage, “It’s not rightfully yours! Not as long as I live!”
“Then die, Duryodhana!”
And the next blow ended the saga that had begun the day a young and lustful girl had married an impotent king.
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ath shri mahabharata katha
wallah, subhaan allah!
though you can pull of this trick as brilliant only once,
there is temptation to write shorties like these for every famous saga.
vivek
I bet you I can pull it off again - in another way
wow @ano
“Perfect” is a very high compliment. Thanks for such unbridled appreciation - I feel honored!
perfect!
perfect!
CN, IW
Thank you for the kind words, sirs!
I am quite drawn to this format of 100 word snapshots - when I was a kid, I had this booklet of stories, called bindu-katha - which were such short-short stories, and I just loved them. The author apparently had died at an early age - so couldn’t write more.
But I think, I shall write some more in this format. It appeals to my own inclination towards minimality of design.
- atra
Brilliant @ Atra
Now that is what i would call, a fanatstic 100 words story. You got some nerve & talent to compress an epic into 100 words. Brilliantly done.
from genesis to revelation...
… in 2 sentences. All other words just built the atmosphere, which is so essential for a good story.
Loved this.