The Last Hurrah - fiancée's POV

Captain Nemo's picture

It is hard waiting anywhere. It is especially hard waiting when you look forward to holding your love close to you and you want that moment to arrive soon… It’s been days since I saw Kalpit, god! I miss him so. I’d never understood what Sinatra meant when he sang ‘I’ve got you under my skin’ but now I feel it… every waking second of my life, I want to be with him.

I’ve arrived here and wait for him to pick me up. The airport café is filled with people, I get myself a cup of cappuccino and sit thinking atleast I wont feel lonely here.

I see him. He is searching for me. Then I see her, an attractive woman in her early twenties, her eyes following him. He doesn’t see me as I am sitting down. I want to see what does, so I rein back my eagerness to hold him close and continue sitting.

I guess Kalpit is panicky now, his eyes are getting smaller in anger, perhaps at himself for being a few mins late or thinks I missed my flight. I get up and wave at Kalpit… He sees me, smiles and starts a short jog to embrace me… As I hold him I close, I so want to kiss him and never want to let go. Then I notice that woman again, I see a strange sense of loss in that woman’s face, almost like a child who’s lost a candy and realises that no one’s noticed it… Desperately seeking for some reassurance that what’s lost can be replaced. Wanting to cry, wanting to hold something or someone close but cant because of some inhibition…

As we let go of each other and look into each other’s eyes, I sense some movement close to us. That woman is coming towards us, I can read determination on her face. Kalpit senses something’s wrong in my eyes and turns to look, that woman gives a peck on his cheek and says “You were wonderful last night,” she then winks at me and leaves… I see Kalpit is tongue tied and stunned at this turn of events for a moment, then he smiles at the back of the woman. I work up the best rage I can and and shout that he is a cheat and a liar… The woman takes a quick look at us, me shouting and Kalpit trying to calm me down… She looks happy.

As she disappears out of sight and out of our hearing range, I wink, smile and hug Kalpit. And I ask him, if he really thought I’d forget the video conference we had last night till the wee hours, almost missing the flight because I cut the time of my departure too fine, so soon?

With my love beside me, I’m at peace… I hope she is too.


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ashoe's picture

Way too "Feel Good"

Nice, and this conforms to the expectation of a “They Happily Lived Ever After” endings Smiling

But good take on it, I guess.

If I were trying to write a feel good ending, I’d revert to something way more far-fetched & ridiculous, I guess - perhaps how Kalpit & le Fiancee’ were swingers, and how disappointed she was that he didn’t share Big Grin

And Fizo, without the videoconferencing, I bet this would take serious explaining for/from most people - but mentioning he spurned the woman’s advances (if he had recognized them for what they were) & caught her fake story out should be enough for most trusting relationships! No?

Just another dyslexic desi
-ashu


hmmm...

agree with asuph here..spoils the charm of the original somehow! I so wanted to see sparks flying…but wondering if there was no videoconferencing going on would the fiancee have believed the woman? It would have been so much more nicer if inspite of not knowing where the man was, she had had belief in him! dunno if I make myself clear!


Aha CN!

I love happy endings that are so happily conceived by our Bollywood happy writers, and I happily lapped up what you must have written after being happy with what you read:)

(Someone said: Too much of happiness can kill a man:)!)

I always like the idea of having follow-up stories and poems and blogs. We all deal with inexhaustible plots, endless possibilities. I would love to see someone rewrite “The Last Hurrah” with Kalpit as the narrator. Any Takers?


Pradzie's picture

yeah like atra says,

yeah like atra says, you’ve jus shown why desi movies someitmes have two endings to please two sets of audience.

I like it, i find it a lil overdone thought towards the end, esp with the desi fiancee shouting at Kalpit to mk sure the gori feels she’s hit the nail. desi babes aren’t like that, are they?
But otherwise a nice attempt, nemo!

I’d like to see how you write a ending for one of Atracus’s stories….now that’d be more funnn Smiling.


atrakasya's picture

redundant? nah, actually...

…this is merely our desire to have happy endings to stories, to make sure that everyone lives happily ever after.


Captain Nemo's picture

asuph

No trouble accepting your criticism… If I weren’t willing to accept brickbats with the bouquets I’d not blog at all.
I agree that it is redundant wrt Vivek’s blog, but what I wrote about was not the story at all. It was the title which caught my fancy.
Now I only hope vivek doesn’t take too unkindly to my effort.


CN

forgive me for being blunt, but this almost spoils the charm of the original story. it’s like analyzing a joke, or trying to explain why it’s not possible or something… i’m not saying it’s not believable, just redundant…

i hope i’m not being overly critical. hell i am actually! so just hoping you’ll take it in the right spirit Smiling.

cheers,
asuph