Through the Looking Glass

Once there was a boy who asked him mom:

“Can you, mom, write poems
A little more
Happy
And a little less
Crappy?”

Now, now. Don’t twist his words,
Cried out the crowds
Out with their swords

But then, such pedantic corrections get us nowhere when we deal
With mighty stuff, of the adult world - full of zeal
Pages after pages trying to obfuscate what we feel

For the kid knows, what the adults forget
And the kid sees what the adults obfuscate

Let me take a breath
And use this time
To give a disclaimer
Lest not my head be put
On the guillotine again
Besides, I’m tired
Of forceful rhyming
And a break
Might work in its favor

It’s a very adult thing to do
Giving the disclaimers
And that explains
Why only adults give them

Enough break
Cried the crowd
Rhyme
Or we’ll shout!

Disclaimers are doubly stupid
Both unnecessary and insipid

For if you’re not claiming
Why disclaim?
And if you are
Why not take the blame?

Thank god I don’t have a son
Who’d ask
Why am I asking question after question!

Good rhyming, the crowds jeered
The mom’s wrath, they all feared
And there are rules to be adhered

Making fun, is the intent not
If you got that, thanks a lot
What? looks like I’ve smoked pot
No no, it’s just a mental clot

Point! Tell us the point
The judges they roared
Those who did self appoint
The rest are just looking bored

What can one say to this
The point, it’s easy to miss

We’re too adult to understand
Despite the kid waving his hand
We think we’re too apart a band
But it’s all written in the sand

The judges, they called foul play
Time wasting tactics, I heard them say

Do I plead insanity, they want to know
Why plead, I say, as I take a bow


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amazing!

i said this to u on SB yesterday,
but i feel the need to repeat it and say -
gosh! asuph! u simply amaze!
with the acrobatics of ur creative ways!


hee hee

one creative acrobat to the other eh a-no?

Truly we are blessed Smiling


I am late!

I am late Asuph but really nice!! Man, how do u come up with so many good posts? What is the secret of your energy? Smiling


to the rest

to many comments, so i can’t address each one individually.

so here goes a bulk thanks. and three cheers to yipper who gave me inspiration, and jeeves who playfully digested it all Big Grin.

so i ain’t the only one wanting to see off disclaimers Eye-wink

and buck, ahem, aren’t we being a little too encouraging Sticking out tongue

cheers,
asuph


Funnycide's picture

fun stuff

i had time to read one last piece on DSS.. and I am glad that I read this.. got me a chuckle or two.. liked the new style of poetry!!


Jiva's picture

yipper says Hi

Hi asuph.

Again, too complicated. Cant you write limericks?
No curse words allowed.
My sister “Rainbow monkey” says hi to you too!!

Yipper


to yipper

well yipper,

I for one am more twisted in mind that your mother, so the word simple is kinda complicated for me Smiling. But I will try. Don’t blame me if I don’t succeed.

and convey my hi to “rainbow monkey” too.

cheers
asuph.


death to disclaimers !!

ROTFL, asuph. Hail the bard-of-DSS Smiling


chay's picture

rotfl!!!

Wow Asupha!!…u rock with this one!!

Disclaimers are doubly stupid
Both unnecessary and insipid
For if you’re not claiming
Why disclaim?
And if you are
Why not take the blame?

rotfl!! i should remember to stop disclaiming my insanity!! after all it my own eh!! Smiling) thanks for the gyan and all…shall always take a bow while claiming my insanity… [waiting for pat on the back]

For the kid knows, what the adults forget
And the kid sees what the adults obfuscate

Oh yeah!!

Ok I cant CPC (chay’s version of CCP) - (taking a bow) the whole poem now can I!! So I will let it be and enjoy it!! Smiling)


now we are talking

maan asuph this was wonderful…!

loved every bit of it….and in rhyme too…

can’t choose one particular stanza because each one was equally good …

>>Pages after pages trying to obfuscate what we feel

this was particularly wow!

Cool

>>Thank god I don’t have a son
Who’d ask
Why am I asking question after question!

This was ROTFL!

and this sir

>>We’re too adult to understand
Despite the kid waving his hand
We think we’re too apart a band
But it’s all written in the sand

was kick-ass!!!

more more….


fizzzzzzz

now now, the rhyme was ridiculously tortured. we’re in a strange world!

except for the last stanza that you’ve quoted here.

what’s with the tabloid? or is the editor too busy in the common room? they don’t advise the jornalists to keep it professional for no reasons, you know Eye-wink

thanks,
asuph.


buck's picture

holy crap!!!

this was genius dude!! lewis carroll would’ve been proud!! Smiling


chetiyaar's picture

wow !

Considering the speed with you came up with that one .. WOW WOW WOW !
you overwhelm man !


inspiredbylife's picture

WOW....

Man you always better stick to buck series… it also get’s out your creativity in it’s best form! Eye-wink


Jiva's picture

This was wonderful

Well, for beginners yipper will say, “It rhymes” and it does too…
MY hubby read my poem yesterday too and was very worried it was inspired by him but he too had issue with the lack of rhyme…

there is a good reason one must not show one’s creative work to family…

am cured of poetry for a while now…

As for your poem asuph, being happy is a job…but that begs a poem..

the one I am challenged not to write…

yes, the child does know things I don’t..


thanks jeeves

lol @ keeeping your creative pursuits away from your family. yeah, S gets pretty concerned about me once in a while Big Grin.

and what’s this cured of poetry? you’ve just found the middle of the bat, as cricket commentators would say. we sure want more

what has being happy got to do with writing happy poems? we’re talking of creative stuff here right?

and again, thanks for taking it in a lighter vein – the way it was written.

regards,
asuph.